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It's all harmless fun,
He knows I'm kidding

                   He's constantly giving reasons
                   That make me want to die

Sure, he's a hideous thing,
But that's not my fault

                   He tells me how ugly I am,
                   That I'm some monstrous being

He's the biggest nerd ever
He deserves to know his level

                   He steals my glasses, hits my books
                   Tells me to stop the "genius act"

I'm always sure to tell others
How we're just playing around

                   He tells the teachers, "we're friends",
                   About how this is just "our little game"


          Soon the day came
          When the bullied
          Couldn't take it
          Another minute more

                   It's either me hanging from a ceiling,
                   Or him bleeding all over his death bed

He came over today, to my house
Told me he wanted to "play our game"

                   I never deserved this, never him,
                   But I know what he deserves, now

He took out a knife from his pocket
And I explained I meant him no harm

                   He didn't want to hurt me in that moment
                   It made him so vulnerable to myself

I apologized having realized
The true monster I had created

                   He only said sorry because
                   I chose his death over mine


          Apologies were given,
          Although never traded
          Blades were slashed,
          Blood was tossed

All I ever did to him was
Tell him words of my opinion

                   All he always did to me
                   Was put me down with insults

In return for that,
He gashed up my skin

                   In return for all his torture,
                   I sliced his wrist, stomach, and face

He walked away from my apology
Leaving me bleeding in pain

                   I walked away from false words
                   Leaving him bleeding, but alive

He didn't kill me...
I don't understand why...

                   I didn't end his life there,
                   He still had a life to suffer


           I walked to the bathroom

     He turned on the faucet

           I washed dirty blood off my blade

     He walked back in the room

           I laid the blade against his cut palm

     He gave me a look that read "murder"

           I walked to the room's corner

     He picked up an extension cord

           I tied it around the ceiling fan

     He looped it around his neck

           I lifted my feet above the ground

     He closed his eyes

           I never smiled, never showed my glee

     His chest ceased rising

           I found myself falling in flames

     He hung from my very own ceiling...

           I saw a light that took me away

     He ended his life because of me...

           I climbed a set of stairs to a golden gate

     I never meant for this...

           I stepped in - now, I live in the clouds

     I never expected this

They were only words...
I wrote this... And I'm the speechless one.

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First of all: wow! It's really dark and bloody but it depicts the truth behind a serious bullying situation. The way it keeps switching perspectives between the bully and the bullied really adds a lot of impact because it's like the reader can catch at every moment the thoughts and later the view of both of them. I like how the two characters keep it between them, that's realistic.
I know some of this comes from your personal experience (and I'm also familiar with the matter) so I know you wrote it to show the world a serious problem that happens everywhere but only a few can see.
Congratulations, in the end this is a great poem overall.
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Akashiya-Yuki Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2014
Like how you switched POV and the way the story was really realistic, like the part where it said it was just a little game. My bully said that to me too. Just...... Amazing.
 Neko Girl-13 (Fangirling Sparkles) [V1] Yasuko Takasu (Fangirling) [V1] 
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RBMetalGuitar Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing!I love dark poems like this!
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, :bow: and dark poems do that sort of lovely essence, don't they? :)
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RBMetalGuitar Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, this remind me of my own past and what I learned from it.  I know what is hidden behind such a poem, how it makes you feel and how it changes you. I hope you're not going through such times anymore :hug:
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, this was partially inspired from a few years ago... Specifically the kid who would tell the teachers we were "just talking" (thus, only words).
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
wow! incredible!
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:bow:
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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Ashbrie13 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Student General Artist
this is absolutely beautiful and devastating but i love how you see both views
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you - I thought that the dual view would bring out a lot more meaning in those two words at the end. Normally, it sounds like just a stereotype we use for bullies defense, that they're "only words". But I tried to bring more of emotive light to that - so thanks. :)
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Ashbrie13 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Student General Artist
Yeah, it was really well worded <3
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deviantsaster Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*puts hand on heart and falls over dramatically* you got me. I'm down.
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Tris96 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Student General Artist
Holy crap.....this is amazing. So freaking powerful, I feel like I've been punched in the gut. I would write a critique but it would basically just be 100 words of me repeating, "This amazing, beautiful, creepy and powerful." And there is only, oh so many ways I can write that over and over. Amazing job, seriously. Elsa Clapping 
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, then. :D Such a compliment. :meow:
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XdarkXnXdeadlyX Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is incredible. The emotion built into this is amazing. its very well written and is very, very, very well done! good job!
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :bow:
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XdarkXnXdeadlyX Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
welcome ^.^
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lopsidelibby Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Student Digital Artist
;n;
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Puglover24 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
wow! This sounds like one of my dreams (only without all the screams of bloody murder) Good job on the poem. I love your style and yoour message! ALthough they may only be words they still have a lot of impact. SOmetimes words can be a matter of life or death. I think you really conveyed that and uncovered a deeper meaning. 
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, it sure sounds like my goal was met with this piece. I'm still speechless myself as the author of it.
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AnnaBellLee17 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Student Writer
o_o...  are you okay?
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Depressive episode with a side of anger... My poetry may be experiencing some worrisome moods...
I'm fine myself, I was listening to "Bully" my TDG and this was inspired. :meow:
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AnnaBellLee17 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Student Writer
ok.  I am happy to hear that you are fine.
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing
nothing more to say, loss of other words
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'll take that as a big compliment. :la:
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Sapphira-Adi Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes it is :meow:
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Kage-Yami Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer

My god, this.... :huggle: I seriously hope this doesn't infer anything going on at the moment...

 

As a poem and the interesting back-and-forward style, I love it!

I would give a critique, but I'd fail at it, so I might as well not...

 

Asuna hugs Lis [V1] 

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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your comment is always great enough. :) It was inspired by "Bully" by TDG. At the moment I'm fine, but memories may have had a partial inference into this...
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Kage-Yami Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's good then, at least its not very recent memories. :)
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