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Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has a family,
Nobody who lives for their care,
Nobody who wants them around,
Nobody who helps them through life,


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has friends,
Not a person there for a simple hug,
Not a person existing for a reassuring look,
Not a person around to leave the words,


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has a home,
No place to live and feel happy in so,
No place to live without leaving again,
No place to live to avoid the truth,


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has a love,
Nothing there to hold them in warm arms,
Nothing there for a kiss to remember,
Nothing there to be a greatness in life,


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has a someone,
"Don't do it - for your family
   They mean nothing to me anymore,
"Don't do it - for your friends"
   Friends? What friends? They don't exist,
"Don't do it - what about home"
   Heaven's clouds are softer than streets,
"Don't do it - what about your lover"
   A lover? Nobody would love scars like these,


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has a reason to live.
Not everyone can find a someone.


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Some find a reasons, but it's not enough.
Some find a someone, but it's not enough.


Suicide is not a stereotype.
When a dead straight, red line
Seems like the best answer to us,
Many will listen, many will not -

Suicide is not a stereotype.
But just because there's times
People don't want Earth any longer:
That gives no soul a single right
To treat them, to treat us,
All the same - as if suicide
Is an action quite the same
In every life ever lived short.

Suicide is not a stereotype.
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The foremost and mpost eye-grabbing detail is the repitition of "suicide is not a stereotype". I have yet to undserstand who misperceived it that way. But the emphasis in your tone was well-conceived. The errant should read this. After each repition, you have done well indeed to explain in thoise terms. There is surely an errant mind to whom you addressed this poem. Now about the conclusion: It was really engrossing, since you went to lengths to empahise the point and then this stanza with its different content. This would fare well as a debate issue/ Well-conceived altogether.
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The-Art-Of-Breathing Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Everyone has somebody, somewhere in the world that cares about them. Whether or not they are willing to find that person is their decision. 
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sadly, that is a true point... I just wish people would try before going to the last decision. 
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The-Art-Of-Breathing Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Suicide is a permanent solution to a temporary problem. 
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ArtisticallyAj Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This Spoke To Me On A Really Personal Level, I Loved it Because I Connected with most parts.
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Makes me glad to hear. Majority of the lines were pulled from my own life and others close to me - a personal relation to the piece was my goal. 
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Student Writer
Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug 
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TerramArmsXIII Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is a very powerful peace, well done!
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
while I've been in this place before, I am thankfully not there now. I appreciate this work and it's bold statements and hope it brings understanding to people who may not yet 'get it'.
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting to read your ramble. :meow: I can agree with your own take over your own reason, as well as people simply just getting to know why. Death by oneself is personal. The saddest thing is how obvious it is that it's a personal issue meant to be found to each specific person that feels so. But apparently, many can't get that through their heads.
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner May 28, 2014
I tend to ramble a lot when it comes to the topic of suicide. I just feel very strongly about it. :P Many people don't seem to understand how suicidal thoughts really work, and even if they do they assume everyone thinks along the same lines. While I don't deny there are consistent reasons for committing suicide (mental illnesses, life events, etc.), there's just too much individual variation to make such broad-sweeping generalizations. And yes, you're right, these variations are obvious, but it's a lot easier to just assume everyone's the same than it is to dig into a person's psyche.

To me, suicide boils down to bodily autonomy. Sure, there are reasons people kill themselves that I wouldn't consider worth it, and yes, I'm well aware that oftentimes loved ones are left behind (and I do sympathize with them), but at the end of the day, I believe a person should have complete control over his/her own body and life.

(Wow, I rambled again. :giggle:)  
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, at least you feel strong about it - that's what's important. People should at least understand that just because there are common patterns in the suicidal thought process, even those are individualized - and they're not the only reasons, either. It just shows how much people these days really care when they don't even bother trying to understand.

That I'd a valid point, that people should have control. I would agree if that person is in their right, normal state of mind. Sometimes an override of emotion can lead to an action that wouldn't have normally been taken when they really think about all the reasons. For example, being so angry with someone that makes your life terrible and you want to die - but later realizing, on a normal tone, that there are more good qualities that are prioritized above that person. My point by all this is that although we should be free to our own decisions, there are times when influence from others who understand may be necessary for one to make the decision that would fit all the factors in their life.

(That's all right, rambles are interesting - it shows thought in detail).
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, this is the loveliest piece of feedback I've ever read on this so far. I'm so happy to know that you've found impact in this, and that it was clearly understood and accepted under your perspective. I'm still doing my best to get this piece seen, and to still try and get people to see. I'm an unpopular poet, persay - this is my second most viewed deviation, but that's enough to me to know that I, in my place, have at least reached that many people. That's 200+ in society that have at least had their hearts touched if even for a moment to open them up to a hard-to-realize reality.
Thank you for your "commentique", it was wonderful to read and to know that at least one of those 200+ was for sure a sucessful reason for writing. :)
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's clear, from looking at this work and your profile, that if you're this young, to be capable of producing such strong, emotional work, it is a sign. You have got a streak of talent within you and I can only ask that you keep nurturing it, for it may bloom into something incredible one day.

If anything, the only reason you would be "unpopular" is because you don't follow market trends, or you're yet to establish yourself (9 months still leaves a lot of room for potential), but all that said, I'm pretty sure popularity is a real fleeting thing. In general, we have minds like sieves, we're quick to forget a person who's popular now and perhaps move on to another talentless hack and make them popular (Just look at music now =p)

Small rant aside, I can only wish that you continue to reach out to as many people as you can, and that work like this continues to be seen. Don't be too disheartened at the numbers if you see them as small, because more to the point, writers aren't exactly noticeable on this site. To get 200+ views, or what have you, it's a great start.

So all that said, it has been my pleasure to give your piece a look and I'm glad you found my words worthwhile. As a hobby writer myself, I could use inspiration like this. :nod:

One more thing, you can be popular in the here and now... or you can leave behind a legacy that'll inspire generations to come. Which would you prefer? =)
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I've heard that from a couple of people that know me best.. I know I'll keep searching in myself for that something that sits there.

I suppose not being popular is a better thing - it at least attracts better feedback since it's people that want to see my work - not following the crowd. (And a complete agreement on the music comment).

Knowing that people are seeing my work is great enough for now. And seeing that me best work comes from these topics... I feel like I'm getting closer to what I mentioned at the beginning. (Which is actually sparking an idea... *reaches for poetry journal*)

Glad to be of inspiration - also glad you find my work worthwhile as well. :)

Leaving a legacy... Inspiring forever. :heart: Ah, that's my dream in life. :heart: I want to be remembered, my name mentioned way after the day of my death. And for that rememberance to be an inspiration, a positive one... Like those who look up to people such as Helen Keller as a role model, or in other cases even Marilyn Monroe being an inspiring role model to people today and generations to come. I simply dream that someday my name can be used in an example like that. :) 
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Just keep it up, consider that advice from a total stranger. =p

You're very much right about that... although eventually you may become popular and everyone will flock to your work, handing out comments that mainly kiss your ass more than anything else, perhaps the best part about being in the shadows is that you will get some people who do care and who do want you to succeed, and do what they can to get you there.

I sure hope you can create a legacy, much like the bands of the past that can still perform and give out a show decades after their first performance. Today, we as a society have begun naming the wrong people as the gods and goddesses we should aspire to... Should try to change all that. =p

Good luck in the future. :wave:
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, that's the lovliest advice / conversation with a stranger - advice surely considered.

And some of those people, I do already have. :)

Hopefully someday society's mind will change to see that they should look up to the people who aspire to be themselves. :meow:

Thank you - been lovely speaking. :meow:
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's been great speaking to you too. Hopefully one day we as writers will get to change the world for the better. :)

All the best! :D
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner May 8, 2014   Writer
This was such a delight read, and which echoes volumes towards the nature of suicide. This one deserves to give its readers pause for thought and reflection. Excellent work!
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you - very much! :)
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StreetTalk121 Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I have not one friend who has not abandoned me, but I do have god.
When we feel like this, so helpless and alone, we must always remember God is there.
You may not see him but you can sure hold on to him!
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Although not everyone shared in that belief, those that do have their reason - but sadly, He's not an answer for everyone.
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StreetTalk121 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Im sorry, I though I would let ya know.
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Completely understandable on that point, just had to make my own considering the poem's topic.
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KellySeale Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are right. But I myself care deeply to all I touch with my words, and all those who touch me- as you have. Don't ever think that because I'm just on the internet/website that I'm just a face in the crowd...I'm a friend who cares. I've love one, maybe two friends online to suicide. I cannot lose another. I fight for life. Your life- and theirs.
-Kelly.
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's imply wonderful to hear feedback such as this. It hurts to lose, but at least if there's people that care it lightens everything if even by a shred of light.
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KellySeale Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You'r so very welcome and deserving. :hug:
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Silidons00 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
A question actually,
When you say "...a dead straight, red line"
Are you talking about a knife wound or the heartbeat monitor?
Or is it either one?
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Heartbeat monitor - but whatever you wish for it to be is perfectly fine. I like the thinking of other ideas for it, actually. :meow:
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Silidons00 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Heartbeat monitor is what I was thinking.
I was just hoping I thought that because that was what you meant, not because of other reasons.
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, well doesn't hurt to check. That's actually why I added the word "dead" to that line to try and make it sound a bit more clear. I figured it was bound to cause some confusion at some point, somewhere.
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Sharky-Shark-47 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's similar to kids in my school. They think child abuse never happens and most think whoever says that is lying and wants attention. So when we learned about it people laughed and called them weak and I just sit there, I know they'll never understand that when the child is really young they can't do anything really..
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You can almost feel bad for them for when reality hits... But most of us know we shouldn't be sorry for them when it happens close to them.
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Aittia Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Student General Artist
Everyone at my school is the same: if something bad doesn't happen to me, it won't happen to anybody else. They jump up and yell 'rape!' or 'suicidal!' in the class and I'm just sitting in the back, head low, hoping that, for a single moment, they'll grow up and see the world in something a little darker than white.

I'm not saying I am suicidal, or anything worse than death has happened to me, my life isn't terrible and I know a lot of people would roll their eyes at me and ask me how I can say that I'm so different, but I am saying that I know people who are, or were, and those comments didn't help one bit.  Disbelief 
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Understandable. I've been there myself and have have been around others as well. I don't wish for people to have to go through it - either way, but to only realize that it happens...
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Aittia Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Student General Artist
Agreed. Today's 'kids' need to grow up, which is strange coming from me, considering I'm still a kid... Sweating a little... 
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I still am too. I prefer to just say young... Those my age who aren't mature are still kids.
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Aittia Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Student General Artist
I support that statement tenfold.
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Ruth-1 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Student General Artist
This is just... so true. It's a very bad stereotype. 
That kid kinda reminds me of people in my school who shout out rape and laugh. They're so damn immature and hurtful. 
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think the problem is people have it in their heads that bad things don't happen to them or the people around them. And yet, they're passed in the streets by people in long sleeves in summer, the quiet, "sad" ones are never seen, people are dying young by a choice, but they're not one of those people - so it supposedly doesn't matter.
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Ruth-1 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Student General Artist
Yeah. It's sad. People don't realise that it could happen to anyone they know, of even them- they might not notice until it's too late.
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AlrikN Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014
I hear from time to time that suicide is stupid and selfish.
I can honestly say having been a person so ready to end my life that no it is not.
What is selfish what is stupide is making a person, a soul and sprite a being,  feel as if they are nothing so much so that they wish to end their own life.
That is not love that is not caring.
That is mean degrading and cruel-
that is stupid and selfish.
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asslvr76 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014
Touche i second ur statement
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, it is. So much truth. What frustrates me is I recently heard a story of a popular deviant comitting suicide. Someone's best friend, and I read through part od the journal she posted about it. "I told him how selfish he was being, and he did it anyways. I can't believe it." I can if you're calling the person selfish if they already wish they weren't here to hear things like that.
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Silidons00 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Dammit.
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Clover0Project Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is...so true. The truth which almost everyone in this world overlooked. Also, that kid is still a child, so he (/she) still doesn't understand this whole world. What in their eyes is still pure; what children sees.
Though, even though I'm still a kid too, the urge to commit suicide just too much. Let's say that I'm one of the unfortunate kids, while the one commented (what you're said) is the fortunate one...or has yet to taste the bitter side of life.

But anyway, great poem. This must be shown in other websites or that kind, since a lot of people ignorant about true nature of suicide...
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
We're all kids in this world, really... Too much not experienced, and many are too ignorant to think enough to understand.

I have yet to look into other sites... Someday.
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CoffeeJesus96 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Writer
People like this really get to me sometimes, especially when they're mature and supposedly wizened unlike the child you're referring to
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Felicia-Neko Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
suicide sadly enough is often misunderstood... for those who commit suicide... those don't see another way out and I wish people would see it that way... thank you for sharing
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