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Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has a family,
Nobody who lives for their care,
Nobody who wants them around,
Nobody who helps them through life,


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has friends,
Not a person there for a simple hug,
Not a person existing for a reassuring look,
Not a person around to leave the words,


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has a home,
No place to live and feel happy in so,
No place to live without leaving again,
No place to live to avoid the truth,


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has a love,
Nothing there to hold them in warm arms,
Nothing there for a kiss to remember,
Nothing there to be a greatness in life,


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has a someone,
"Don't do it - for your family
   They mean nothing to me anymore,
"Don't do it - for your friends"
   Friends? What friends? They don't exist,
"Don't do it - what about home"
   Heaven's clouds are softer than streets,
"Don't do it - what about your lover"
   A lover? Nobody would love scars like these,


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Not everyone has a reason to live.
Not everyone can find a someone.


Suicide is not a stereotype.
Some find a reasons, but it's not enough.
Some find a someone, but it's not enough.


Suicide is not a stereotype.
When a dead straight, red line
Seems like the best answer to us,
Many will listen, many will not -

Suicide is not a stereotype.
But just because there's times
People don't want Earth any longer:
That gives no soul a single right
To treat them, to treat us,
All the same - as if suicide
Is an action quite the same
In every life ever lived short.

Suicide is not a stereotype.
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The foremost and mpost eye-grabbing detail is the repitition of "suicide is not a stereotype". I have yet to undserstand who misperceived it that way. But the emphasis in your tone was well-conceived. The errant should read this. After each repition, you have done well indeed to explain in thoise terms. There is surely an errant mind to whom you addressed this poem. Now about the conclusion: It was really engrossing, since you went to lengths to empahise the point and then this stanza with its different content. This would fare well as a debate issue/ Well-conceived altogether.
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:iconthe-art-of-breathing:
The-Art-Of-Breathing Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Everyone has somebody, somewhere in the world that cares about them. Whether or not they are willing to find that person is their decision. 
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Student Writer
Sadly, that is a true point... I just wish people would try before going to the last decision. 
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:iconthe-art-of-breathing:
The-Art-Of-Breathing Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Suicide is a permanent solution to a temporary problem. 
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ArtisticallyAj Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This Spoke To Me On A Really Personal Level, I Loved it Because I Connected with most parts.
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:iconlmw-creations:
LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Student Writer
Makes me glad to hear. Majority of the lines were pulled from my own life and others close to me - a personal relation to the piece was my goal. 
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Student Writer
Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug Hug 
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ArcNovaXIII Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is a very powerful peace, well done!
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
while I've been in this place before, I am thankfully not there now. I appreciate this work and it's bold statements and hope it brings understanding to people who may not yet 'get it'.
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Student Writer
Interesting to read your ramble. :meow: I can agree with your own take over your own reason, as well as people simply just getting to know why. Death by oneself is personal. The saddest thing is how obvious it is that it's a personal issue meant to be found to each specific person that feels so. But apparently, many can't get that through their heads.
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